Editing and explaining the paragraph :- SHAHDADKOT

When you have everything that you need to make a new invention, it is a tiny achievement in the eyes of justice. When you have nothing that you need to make a new thing,it is great achievement in the eyes of justice. “SHAHDADKOT the darkest in education and the brightest in illiteracy and unemployment.A man with books is considered an alien, because men are often found working for leading a simple life that includes meal to eat and water to drink. However, it is not that the city of SHAHDADKOT is known as the city of ignorant people,there are great professors of English(Faizullah Magsi, Nazeer Bhatti,Saleem Raza Mirani, Naseer Soomro, Saeed Wadho and whatnot.),Mathematics(Salah din Soomro,Abdullah Wadho,Iltaf Hussain Chandio and Etc),Physics(Mian Gul Mekan, Fazul Muhammad Umrani and Etcetera),Chemistry (Noor Nabi Bhatti and Etc),Biology(Shazad Soomro, Arshad Soomro Amjad Brohi and Etc). I am sorry to the teachers whom I couldn’t mention because I couldn’t recall their names at the moment. At the same time I am sorry to say that I cannot mention even a single name of a professor or a lecturer in computer science here in our city,looking at the prospective on cannot imagine anyone progressed in computer science. But it is well said,”God helps those who help themselves. ” I worked day in and day out to prove my zeal towards computer science, I took the help of many websites and books to make a new application, Alhamdulillah my work is half done and I believe that within the passage of time I will encounter my project and will introduce it here is in my city and then world wide…..

 

 

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When you have everything that you need to make a new invention, it is a tiny achievement in the eyes of Jury. SHAHDADKOT:- the city which is considered as the darkest in education and the brightest in illiteracy and unemployment.A man with books is considered an alien, because men are often found working for leading a simple life that includes meal to eat and water to drink. However, it is not that SHAHDADKOT is known as the city of ignorant people,there are great professors of English(Faizullah Magsi, Nazeer Bhatti,Saleem Raza Mirani, Naseer Soomro, Saeed Wadho and whatnot.),Mathematics(Salah din Soomro,Abdullah Wadho,Iltaf Hussain Chandio and Etc),Physics(Mian Gul Mekan, Fazul Muhammad Umrani and Etcetera),Chemistry (Noor Nabi Bhatti and Etc),Biology(Shazad Soomro, Arshad Soomro Amjad Brohi and Etc)

I am sorry to the teachers whom I couldn’t mention because I couldn’t recall their names at the moment. At the same time I am sorry to say that I cannot mention even a single name of a professor or a lecturer in computer science here in our city,looking at the prospective on cannot imagine anyone progressed in computer science. But it is well said,”God helps those who help themselves. ” I worked day in and day out to prove my zeal towards computer science, I took the help of many websites and books to make a new application, Alhamdulillah my work is half done and I believe that within the passage of time I will encounter my project and will introduce it here is in my city and then world wide…..

 

Mistake – 1

Always write noun:- In the eyes of “Doctor”

Another ex.

I am innocent in the eyes of my father

We don’t say :- In the eyes of “Fatherhood”

 

Mistake – 2

Shahdadkot is the city/village/hamlet (You didn’t mention, when you wrote the name of Shahdadkot)

Rest is excellent.

Your writing skills are awesome.

Keep on improving.

 

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175+ secrets to improve English Grammar in 2018 – English Ma’am

 

 

 

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