Ibni Ibrahim Hassan has written beautifully on “Importance of Education”

Ibni Ibrahim Hassan has written beautifully on “Importance of Education”

Dear Ibni Ibrahim Hassan,

As an English Teacher, I must congratulate you for writing so well.

Here, is what you wrote

Education is crucial nowadays if we want to get better life in the future we should educate ourselves by continue learning why are we learning
Because we prevent to fall behind and the world is growing faster than before with new technology
At moment the knowledge is the key every area in our life.

 

There are few mistakes:-

Write short sentences . (Max One and half line)

I can’t see any full stop. (Please make note) Ok?

Don’t start the sentence with
“BECAUSE”

After “Future” I have started a new sentence (check below)

 

Education is crucial nowadays if we want to get better life in the future. We should educate ourselves by continuously learning
If we prevent  ourselves, we will fall behind. The world is growing faster than before, with new technology
Currently the knowledge is the key every area in our life.

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