Very well written Nasser :- “My favorite destinations in Somaliland”

Yassen My favourite destinations
May 18, 2018 it was the day of Somaliland comeback it’s freedom from Somalia role since in may 18,1961

during my six week summer holiday one day I got invitation from my friend and he lived berbera Beach i thinking about all of the great places I have been and my favourite destinations I have visited during my holidays, being my friend get 13 weeks a year so
I visited berbera Beach Somaliland it was my second time I visit. it was a wonderful trip I had such an amazing trip there I hopefully going back again next year. Berbera Beach is a really unique destination, it has so much to offer and i just loved it. I especially enjoyed doing a tour of Somaliland as well as the famous Berbera Beach Trip.
good lucky everyone in here.

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Edited and explained the mistakes :- Topic “What is Life”

We and everything – the Sun ,the Moon ,the stars,the Earth,the sky ,the Heavens, th , the hell,the angles , animals and objects -are created by the Almighty God, Ishvar ,Allah ,The Creator , Sarjanhaar,Khaaliq.
We should worship Him only He is not our Father. He is our Master We are His humble slaves.
We should be honest to our Master . Honesty is the best policy . Honesty is the Jewell of humanbeing.
Today, we see our politicians are the most corrupted persons . We all are the brothers and sisters .
the children of Adam and Eve. Peace be upon them

 

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Very well written and explained by Abu Hussain-

I am so happy for you.

Just few minor mistakes which I explained below 

Mistakes explained for topic “Importance of Brotherhood”

Ahmad Rayees has written the following paragraph on the topic
“Importance of Brotherhood”

The word Brotherhood is itself a respectable deed. For peaceful and joyful society, brotherhood plays vital role. Brotherhood means to help others especially needy ones and build a common platform where every individual of the society live peacefully and joyfully. With such advantages of brotherhood it also enables us to build a strong society and reduce the social tensions among masses.
It helps us to bulid crime free society because when we help others we feel happy. As almose social crimes whether it is wine business, theif etc increasing because of poverty. In most of the cases poor man take such steps to feed his family. But when this poor man get helped by someone it enables him to live harmonious life. These are some fruits of brotherhood. We should feel proud on it and try to expand it to more areas to reduce social crimes.

The word Brotherhood is itself a respectable deed (use “deed”. For peaceful and joyful society, (use comma after society) brotherhood plays  (vitally :-no word)  vital or important (use vital or important) role. Brotherhood means to help others especially needy ones and build a common platform where every individual of the society live peacefully and joyfulully (joyfully) With such advantages of brotherhood it also enables us to build a strong society and reduce the social tensions among masses.

 

 


My view-
Very well written and practically presented. Good job Ahmad
There are following mistakes:-
Use “deed” in the following sentence
The word Brotherhood is itself a respectable “deed”
Use “comma” in long sentences and full stop, when required.
Vitally – No word
Vital is the word
Never use “Vital” and “Important” together. They mean the same thing. 
Check spelling of “Joyfully”, “Build”, “Almost”
Never start a sentence with “With”
Also Refer the image for the detailed mistakes, you have made.
Thanks

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Johnson Herman – An English Teacher from Benin in Africa invites everyone to visit his beautiful country

Johnson Herman – An English Teacher from Benin in Africa invites everyone to visit his beautiful country

He says

BENIN is a very good country of Africa .It is between Nigeria and Togo . In Benin our native language is fon-gbé .We also speak Yoruba , Sahouè , Adja In BENIN .

We speak French and English at school . We like to listen music and play games .

Our favorite meal is “wô” and rice.

It’s sometimes sunny in BENIN .

 

I will be very happy to welcome the members of this group in my country. Herman JOHNSON.

 

Note of Thanks

Note of Thanks

I am Arpit Sharma, a 11 years experienced teacher in India and I thank my friend Johnson

I am your friend and I whole heartedly thank you for giving us such an interesting facts about your country .
I never knew about so many languages being spoken.
I accept your invitation of visiting the country sometime in life.

I am also happy that WE ARE FRIENDS NOW.

 

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Zayyan Umar wrote about “Importance of Education” – You need improvement

 

Zayyan has beautifully written on the topic.

“”Importance of Education”.

Education is very important why because education is a something that deffirenciate between good and bad attititude or behaviour ,right and wrong attitude or behaviour just and injustance attitude or behaviour , otherwise what ever you wanna do in this word if u have an education u most deffirentiate with uneducated ,like business ,why becouse if you have an education u can write and u can read but if you are not educated man how can you write or read ? Also writing and reading is very important to business man, then education will help you to know the way commication with people

 

 

 

Excellent efforts put my Zayyan Umar

I want to say following things:-

  1. Never repeat the same word in a paragraph.

You repeated the word “behavior” 8 times.

2. You should know the spellings, learn them.
You made lots of sepelling mistakes

3. Don’t use “why” and “because” together

4. Never use “slang” words such as “wanna”

 

Rest is fine.

Now, read the below para. I have corrected it.

 

  • Edited by English Teacher

Education is very important because it differentiates between good and bad, right and wrong , just and unjust attitude or behaviour.

Whatever you want to do in this word if u have an education u can easily have your own place.

Because, if you have education u can write and u can read but if you are not an educated man then can you write or read ? Also writing and reading is very important to business man, education will help you to know the way of communication with people

 

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Yassen is a budding writer from Somaliland 

 

 

Yassen is a writer and has beautifully written about “Importance of Education”

Yassen Mo Hassan has written a highly informative paragraph about
“Importance of Education”
Let’s check it :-
  • “Education is very important to all of us. Our parents make us learn many things at home and then send us to school after age of three years. Our home is first education institute where we learn how to behave to others and other skills however school education is very necessary to be successful in practical life. Through school education we learn and develop personality, mental skills, moral and physical powers”

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Excellent…I am telling you mistakes now
 
1. First “educational” institute
2. How to behave “with” others
 
Rest is correct
Only 2 minor mistakes

Abebe Aynalem – A handsome, young man from Ethopia is a football fan

Abebe Aynalem is a young and handsome man from the beautiful place on earth that is Ethiopia.

Yes, the country is known for high degree of football craze. People in Ethopia simply love watching football.

Likewise, Abebe Aynalem also loves to watch sport.

He is a highly motivated young man with a vision to create a happy and better place for Ethopians.

He is a man who loves honesty and hardwork and he requests everyone to be honest.
He wants that his country should be rid of poverty.

 

Note of Thanks to Abebe Aynalem

I am ARPIT SHARMA an English teacher from India I want to personally thank Abebe Aynalem for sharing views about his country.

 

I also wish him all the best for his future.

May he get all the success which he deserves.

 

Thank You

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Abdulwahid Galmo Elemo is an ambitious young man with a vision to end corruption and poverty of his country

 

Abdulwahid Galmo Elemo is from beautiful, lovely, awesome and great area known as Dire Dawa

Being a student, he is quite hardworking and also highly ambitious. Yes, he wants to do Political science and lead his country by ending the overall corruption and  poverty by giving equal rights to the citizens.

He wants that poverty should end from his country and he wants to fight against corruption which is eating his country.

He is quite optimistic and hopeful that he will bring the change in his country.

Note of Thanks to the TEACHERS OF Abdulwahid Galmo Elemo

I am ARPIT SHARMA an English teacher from India I want to personally request his college teachers that he is very talented and hardworking.

I have talked to him many times and I can see that he has a vision which if honed at the right time, can actually give lots of pleasant change for the country.

I thank him and also wish him all the best for his future.

May he get all the success which he deserves.

 

Thank You

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Tito Omer Hasan from Sudan loves playing football

Mohamed Omer is a young, motivated, energetic and highly inspiration lad from the beautiful, awesome and naturally beautiful place popularly known as  Khartoum, Sudan.

He is a university going student and besides being excelling in academics, he is also very polished and sincere towards taking extra – curricular activities.

Yes, he is an awesome football player and his moves and style is quite similar to world famous Argentinian soccer player Leonel Messi.
Yes, if you see him playing, I am sure you will relate his style, quite similar to that of Leo Messi.

Football is a beautiful and highly energetic game and he plays to not just derive enjoyment, but also to make him fit.

He has got several prizes while making his team victorious

 

Note of Thanks

I wish you Mohamed Omer , BEST OF LUCK for your future

 

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